haiku and archery

[Atrelu]

These are about walking through my archery club at the base of Mt Dandenong. Lately it has been my favorite place to be by myself.


arrow flies
in the forrest
a kookburra

in the trees
rain falls through
mountain air

[Eberbachl]

Cool :wink:

[Clare Barnes]

For Haiku and Microsoft go to:

http://www.archery-forum.com/viewtopic.php?t=82923&start=690 8)

[Eberbachl]

I was actually expecting......

arrow flies
in the forrest
a kookaburra


.....falls out of it's tree

:rofl:

[Flame]

:rofl:

[Marcus]

what are the rules of Haiku again?

[Marcus]

I shoot arrow at paper
my nock heads left
torque supreme




Twenty-One Tens
Nine more is hard
I choke again

[Clare Barnes]

I shoot arrow at paper
my nock heads left
torque supreme




Twenty-One Tens
Nine more is hard
I choke again


1. Haiku poetry has strict construction rules - each poem has only 17 syllables; 5 syllables in the first line, 7 in the second, 5 in the third.

2. They are used to communicate a timeless message, often achieving a wistful, yearning and powerful insight through extreme brevity. It must register or indicate a moment, sensation, impression or drama of a specific fact of nature.

Think your compliance with the first part is lacking, though the second part is well covered! :wink: :D

[Flame]

2. They are used to communicate a timeless message, often achieving a wistful, yearning and powerful insight through extreme brevity. It must register or indicate a moment, sensation, impression or drama of a specific fact of nature.



I think Marcus has covered this well :D

[Marcus]

Now that my wife has finished laughing at me.

:x

when my nock heads left
I shoot arrow at paper
need to work on grip


Shoot Twenty-One Tens
just nine more to reach godlike
One more choke again

[Axilla]

Does my signature comply with haiku? :D

[Atrelu]

cut and pasted from http://www.ahapoetry.com/haiku.htm#comego
notice the lack of 5-7-5!


That Lovable Old Issa


Much has been written about the two famous Japanese poets, Buson and Basho, however, we seldom find any extended writing about the third and extremely important poet, Issa. His name is derived from the Japanese word ichi, meaning 'one', and cha, meaning 'tea', which are shortened to the name Issa. This quaint old poet was born in a farmhouse in the ancient village of Kashiwabara in 1763.

Issa had a very sad life and finally died in a storage house or 'go-down' in 1827. He is indicated as one of the queerest and gentlest, while still most lovable of the seventeen-syllable poets Japan has ever produced. His full name was Kobayashi Tataro, which he used until he started writing serious poetry. At that time he changed his name to Issa.

Issa had lived a very lonely life after his mother died when he has was two. He lived with relatives after that time, but his early verses show that he was still an extremely lonesome young man. Tradition records that at about the age of six years his loneliness was reflected in his poetry Ware to kite asobeya oya no nai suzume which translates to:

Come over with me
and together let's play
Oh, motherless sparrow.

Living this somewhat solitary life, he spent time with various members of his family until he was thirteen years of age, at which time his father decided to kick him out into the world, and he walked to old Yedo, which is now Tokyo.

He lived about eleven years in Edo, spending his time in a temple, and little is heard of him until he was about twenty-four, when he began to write serious poetry. Issa returned to his hometown when he was about 38 years old. From that time on he travelled back and forth between his hometown and Yedo and tried to make himself acceptable to his family. They didn't receive him kindly or even invite him into their homes, so that by the time he was forty-nine he decided to leave the area permanently.

His sadness at this rejection is reflected in this poem: Furusato ya yoru mo sawaru mo bara no hana.

My native village
on approach and to the touch
a bramble rose.

[Flame]

see rule three :D

[DrRalph]

The black arrow leaps
arcing against a red sky
vanishing in gold

[Axilla]

Maybe this complies:

arrow fall in scrub
look for days I no find him
WTF him go?

[OldDog]

Cable break at full draw
Old dog stunned
Old dog swears a lot

[DrRalph]

Today on the range:

a chilling wind blasts
muscles tense, limbs flex, sight moves
flight! blue... down again.

still air settles in
fluid motion, balance, aim
the world fades out, X

[Juggs]

no like this
rose are red
my arse is quite smelly
run around nude while shaking my belly

[Eberbachl]

:o :rofl: :o

[Marcus]

new indoor hero
from Diamond Valley Archers
nice shooting alan


beating the master
till new face I go misjudge
damn he wins again


please ensure your haiku's are structured correctly
-mod

[Clare Barnes]

Cat Haiku
The rule for today.
Touch my tail, I shred your hand.
New rule tomorrow.

Well, I'm still waiting ... that was written the day before yesterday! :P

[Flame]

your wish is my command :D

[robbo]

Maybe this complies:

arrow fall in scrub
look for days I no find him
WTF him go?

:rofl:

[Clare Barnes]

Maybe this complies:

arrow fall in scrub
look for days I no find him
WTF him go?

:rofl:

But robbo .... if one reads it as wtf (double you tee eff), there are too many syllables in the last line for it to be haiku!!! 8) :D

I, of course, have no idea of another way to say those letters! :angel:

[Axilla]

arrow fall in scrub
look for days I no find him
was this fate him go?

Just to clear up any possible misinterpretation.

[robbo]

Maybe this complies:

arrow fall in scrub
look for days I no find him
WTF him go?

:rofl:

But robbo .... if one reads it as wtf (double you tee eff), there are too many syllables in the last line for it to be haiku!!! 8) :D

I, of course, have no idea of another way to say those letters! :angel:


Hey, but it was still funny. :D

[robbo]

arrow fall in scrub
look for days I no find him
was this fate him go?

Just to clear up any possible misinterpretation.

The original is better. :D

[MerlinApexDylan]

Stretch for the sky.
watch as it fly.

Oh no, it hit dirt. :lol:

wait a minute, in clout that might be a good thing. :-?

[Gone]

Big greased Yoda doll
shoved ever so tightly in
Martin shooter's hole

:D

[Harald]

Hoyt and Mathews..
A moment they rule the field...
Noise of cables breaking... 8)

[Zoe]

MAD and The Donkey
Please refer to Clare's last post
For rules of haiku

(not very timeless granted)

[Eberbachl]

Erika make egg and bacon
mmmmmm it is very yummy
rest of group not think so

:rofl:

[Harald]

MAD and The Donkey
Please refer to Clare's last post
For rules of haiku

(not very timeless granted)

Arigato gozaimazu

Haiku Donkey wakkarimazen (may Koh jai) (no habla) (don't get the syllable thing i must admit) (Verstehen doch nichts)(Skj

[robbo]

Erika make egg and bacon
mmmmmm it is very yummy
rest of group not think so

:rofl:

Who ate the egg n bacon? :o :D

[Axilla]

Why are cats and dogs
mortal foes since time began
When both are chow mein?

[Eberbachl]

Erika make egg and bacon
mmmmmm it is very yummy
rest of group not think so

:rofl:

Who ate the egg n bacon? :o :D

ME :P

:onfire:

[robbo]

:onfire: :rofl:

[Axilla]

Few are on forum
And fewer are posting crap
Why has it gone flat?